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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 01:34 am |
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I joined yesterday, so...
I wrote a 94 page play with guidance from a two time Emmy winner (for writing, natch). I have sent it out for consideration by 70-80 venues so far, with four or five polite rejections, but without a positive response, though many have not looked at it yet I suppose. I believe that the premise is good and there is enough drama, but I fear it lacks enough poetry for serious consideration because I'm not a poet. Perhaps some tough love and many dope slaps would help?
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Potabasil
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 02:07 am |
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Hi Joebob
Welcome
You need to speak to Timmy our resident Poet
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Joebob
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 02:11 am |
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| How do I do that?
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 02:22 am |
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Look up listing on site Critique my Poem. Timmy is a wonderful poet, he's also a lovely fellow
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Joebob
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 02:58 am |
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in media res
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 03:33 am |
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Joebob.
You came to the right place to get slapped around.
But we'll do it with respect with goose down pillows!
Why not post the first 10-15 pages and see the reaction?
Welcome. We've all been there.
best,
in media res
P.S. I hope you are writing that second play!Last edited on Sun Mar 30th, 2008 03:34 am by in media res
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Paddy
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 05:06 am |
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Welcome, Joebob.
Posting the first ten or fifteen pages is sage advice.
Looking forward to reading you.
Paddy
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Potabasil
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 05:35 pm |
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| http://books.google.com/books?id=wXwCAAAAYAAJ&pg=PA668&lpg=PA668&dq=up+the+airy+mountains+and+down+the+rush+glen&source=web&ots=wo88CKMCnS&sig=KphdXyDmbOVgSbxIS9OUiRKYJtg&hl=en#PPA693,M1
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Potabasil
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 05:38 pm |
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JoBob
I sent you a link to a Libary of Poems and songs (Google Books) Maybe if you read some it may inspire you re the poetry in your play. Hope it opens for you, you can also down load it to PDF or Text (the whole book)
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Posted: Sun Mar 30th, 2008 09:13 pm |
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Hey Joebob, I don't know but I'm pretty damn impressed that you sent it out to 70-80 venues. I mean, really?
Be patient. Many places take months and months to respond. And some never do. Or even read it.
I think it's a curious remark about the poetry of the piece. So yeah, I'm curious too, post some!
and welcome from another new member
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Posted: Mon Mar 31st, 2008 12:04 am |
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| Yes. it opened easily, and thank you for it. Poetry requires lateral thinking, and I am a bit out of practice. I posted the first 10pp. of BIG GAME HUNTER/LOVE last night. DO YOUR WORST, PLEASE!
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Posted: Mon Mar 31st, 2008 12:15 am |
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| In my former life, I was a scientist, so excessive thoroughness is a big character flaw. I know that it may take a long time in many cases, but I do believe that if they say they will read it, then they will. A big mistake was sending it to most places, then re-reading some Pinter and realizing that, by taking out a few words, I would significantly improve the ending. Woe is me. Such is life!
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Posted: Mon Mar 31st, 2008 01:17 am |
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JoeBob
Much as I would love to Critique your play, I'm afraid I am but a novice. I will leave that to the more experienced playwrights around here.
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Joebob
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Posted: Mon Mar 31st, 2008 02:44 am |
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1. I too am a novice. This is my first and only play.
2. Most audience members have not written plays, so your opinions may be a true (and therefore vauable) reflection of their thoughts.
3. I'm not proud. I'll take good advice/ideas from ANYONE willing to take the time to give them.
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Posted: Wed Apr 2nd, 2008 02:05 pm |
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Joebob wrote: In my former life, I was a scientist, so excessive thoroughness is a big character flaw. I know that it may take a long time in many cases, but I do believe that if they say they will read it, then they will. A big mistake was sending it to most places, then re-reading some Pinter and realizing that, by taking out a few words, I would significantly improve the ending. Woe is me. Such is life!
Hi, Joebob:
You're absolutely right about sending out your play too soon. You also should workshop the play or have a reading with actor friends, if possible. This will help you find flaws and be able to rework things. Revision is very important to make your play the best it can be.
Luana
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Posted: Wed Apr 2nd, 2008 06:53 pm |
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| I did have it read by actor friends over a year ago and it is quite different than it was then e.g., about ten % shorter. What did you think of the first ten pages posted in the gym?
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