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carlblong
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Posted: Fri Feb 29th, 2008 12:34 am |
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I'm not sure if I like this one or not:
THE JOKE ABOUT THE PROSTITUTE
By Carl Brandt Long
AT RISE: Two guys, ONE and TWO, enter, walking together. A WOMAN enters from the other direction. The guys look at her as she passes, and when she exits, TWO whistles.
ONE
That reminds me of a really funny joke. These two guys are walking down the street, right?
TWO
Okay.
ONE
And they see a beautiful woman walk by. Absolutely stunning.
TWO
Sure.
ONE
And the one guy says to the other, “Do you have any money? I want to sleep with that prostitute.” The other guy says, “She’s not a prostitute, dude.” And the first guy says, “Sure she is! You can tell by the way she’s walking.” Well, they argue for a few minutes and finally the second guy says, “Look, if you go over there and ask her, and she says yes, she is a hooker, I’ll give you a hundred bucks.”
TWO
I don’t think the second guy would say that.
ONE
No no no. But he does. And the first guy says, “Make it two hundred and you got yourself a deal.”
TWO
Bull.
ONE
So the second guy agrees —
TWO
The hell he does.
ONE
— and the first guy runs over to the girl — she’s about a block away now, and asks her. He’s real nervous and everything, right? He says, “I have a bet going with my friend whether you’re a prostitute or not.” And you know what she says?
TWO
No, what?
ONE
She says, “Tell him he lost.”
(ONE starts to laugh. Pause.)
TWO
I don’t get it.
(ONE punches TWO, knocking him out. He then rifles through TWO’s wallet, takes out $200 and runs off toward the woman.)
THE END
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Posted: Fri Feb 29th, 2008 11:00 pm |
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Carl,
I didn't get the joke so much, but I very much liked the flow of the dialogue. You did walk a fine line, successfully, between tell business and show business. I had fun. Thank you.
~Edd
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Paddy
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Posted: Sat Mar 1st, 2008 12:01 am |
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The fine line. Had a hard time replying...but I'm thinking this...
Why not write it as a play, instead of a play about a joke?
Paddy
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Martin H
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Posted: Sat Mar 1st, 2008 07:55 am |
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| Maybe make it the first episode in a longer play. I can see a Baal like character emerging in One (who I think will have to have a name).
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carlblong
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Posted: Sun Mar 9th, 2008 11:20 pm |
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Looking at it again and again (and with some distance now), I've come to realize this:
The joke in the play is (obviously) not funny. The real joke is the play itself. It has the setup, the execution, and the punchline (in this case, a literal one). Whether this joke is funny or not is a judgement call. Sometimes I laugh when I read it, sometimes I dry-heave.
Thanks for reading it, and for your input!
Carl
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