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timmy
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Posted: Sun Mar 2nd, 2008 11:10 pm |
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(Scene: Counselor’s Office)
Counselor: And then?
Wife: And then we fell in love and got married. It was wonderful.
Counselor: The marriage?
Wife: No. The ceremony.
Counselor: I see.
Wife: But soon after we began to fight. Milton just wouldn’t take me seriously.
Counselor: Constant fighting?
Wife: No...usually on weekends. Saturdays mostly...Sundays we were both so tired. We started throwing things at each other because Milton wouldn’t take me seriously.
Counselor: What things?
Wife: Dishes. Furniture. (beat...beat) A mirror once. I knew that would be bad luck. Oh...and one other time, he dared me to throw my dog at him.
Counselor: Your dog?
Wife: Fluffy.
Counselor: (Stifling a smile) Was your husband hurt?
Wife: Not right away. It was only later because Milton never took me seriously. That is his... (beat...beat) ...WAS his biggest problem.
Counselor: How much later?
Wife: It was after Fluffy passed away. After I brought home the St. Bernard.
(Pause)
Counselor: Are you serious?
Wife: Oh, yes. Dead serious.
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Basso
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Posted: Mon Mar 3rd, 2008 01:52 am |
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Ouch, that's gotta hurt. The irony of a St Bernard killing one. That was great timmy.
Basso
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Paddy
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Posted: Mon Mar 3rd, 2008 07:31 pm |
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I like the dialogue flow in this very much, but it feels a bit like a set-up to the punchline.
When trying to figure out what happens next, I couldn't really come up with something. I think this is fun, and interesting, maybe you could turn a corner somewhere and steer away from the punch line.
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Martin H
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Posted: Tue Mar 4th, 2008 11:04 am |
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| I do have to wonder is that woman on steroids? A St Bernard's got a certain heft to it and throwing one would tax my strength especially if for any reason it didn't want to be thrown.
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Will Kemp
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Posted: Sat Mar 15th, 2008 03:00 am |
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| This is funny. I was wanting to hear what he threw at her too!
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