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Nate88
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Posted: Mon Feb 25th, 2008 11:05 pm |
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Iv written two really self indulgent plays here focusing on my favourate aspects of fast paced snappy diolouge if only for a page or two...
could you please pick the one you think works the best because I am hoping to get them staged along side 3 other simlar things i wrote as a kind of revue night...
hope you enjoy...
Nothing Speical
1: did you see the lottery numbers?
2: I didn’t play this week
1: how come?
2: I didn’t feel like it this time
1: not feeling lucky any more?
2: never did I don’t think
1: queer, isn’t it…
2: what?
1: luck
2: its simple, you either have it or you don’t
1: same as talent I guess
2: you…guess?
1: …know
2: getting a bit nippy, don’t you think?
1: I haven’t been able to feel my toes in years
2: no
1: certainly
2: huh, silence I never noticed until recently the way things keep changing ever so slowly, have you noticed that?
1: changing?
2: it never occurred to me until now that the nights slowly get shorter, and I can notice these now each day as the sun sets, if only by a matter of minutes, yet it still vanishes slightly shorter or slightly longer than the last depending on season…
1: it’s nothing special, its common sense.
2: yes but what im saying…
1: I don’t care anymore…I am tired, I am restless, I am irritable.
2: I am not?
1: no, you wake up. Full you are of the joys of spring and you sing your songs and you tell your tales and I just sit, and I hate this. I hate that soon…that soon… fades off in his thought
2: what…what is it?
1: its nothing, nothing at all.
Silence over comes the both of them, 1 stares into space as if he can see something in the foreground, nothing appears, silence
Blood
Lights up, two men sat on the ground, 1 is bleeding from the mouth.
1: Blood
2: so what of it?
1: im bleeding
2: so am I
1: im serious
2: im not?
1: no. my blood, my blood is real!
2: mine is not?
1: no. with every breath I let more
2: I don’t?
1: I leave tomorrow, and you don’t shed a single tear. You mock. I thought we meant more?
2: you do
1: show me
2: I can’t, you know I can’t… (Silence)…so, this is it?
1: I would assume so.
2: you assume?
1: Im aware im on my way out right now
2: you are.
1: I said I would be, and this is what I had hoped
2: I guess
1: I guess
2: you where a little ambiguous
1: I had to be
2: he had to be
1: what now?
2: we wait, I guess
1: I guess…for what?
2: for this
1: oh yes. I forget
2: Blood.
1: I’m cold
2: here, take my coat.
1: why, thank you
lights fade to black
Last edited on Tue Feb 26th, 2008 12:41 am by Nate88
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Corerro
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Posted: Tue Feb 26th, 2008 05:53 am |
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| I think the first grabbed my attention more than the second. There is a similarity to the format of questions in both pieces, but the first seemed more pregnant. I'm curious about what the second piece might mean to you...
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Martin H
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Posted: Tue Feb 26th, 2008 11:16 am |
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| I roughly agree with Correro, though I think the first dialogue rambles a bit, and the rambles aren't terribly funny. The poignance aimed at in the closing lines would be more forcible if the leadup were more consistently funny.
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Nate88
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Posted: Tue Feb 26th, 2008 06:04 pm |
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both are along the same lines due to the entirety of it all was inspired from the existentialist and absurdist points of view...
i know its not keeping fully within these traditions it was just a starting point.
though I am aware now that both are stupidly overstated.
I was steering towards the first one myself...
Last edited on Tue Feb 26th, 2008 06:04 pm by Nate88
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Edd
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Posted: Tue Feb 26th, 2008 06:22 pm |
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Nate,
I loved both of them. However, had I to pick only one, I too would choose the first as my favorite. Funny you use the pejorative term "self-indulgent." I saw it more as Self-reflective--aspects of the Self reflecting on the condition of the human. Usually when someone dares mention the word existential or Theatre of the Absurd, I pull up stakes and pitch my tent elsewhere. But you, my friend, did not disappoint. My tent remains. Thank you.
~Edd
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Nate88
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Posted: Tue Feb 26th, 2008 06:30 pm |
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I meant self indulgent purely because all my heroes are from this class of art and it is a kind of safe zone for me at the moment, because that is the form that intrests me the most.
Also because the whole quote: "Birth was the death of him" - Plauges me daily
and I didnt realise using those WORDS where taboo?
But thank you very much for you're kind words Edd!!
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