I didn't realize that people used such creativity in choosing their username. Mine is rather boring in comparison, I suppose. But, here I am: David Rigano. I'm a New York playwright (because there aren't enough of those, right?) who also directs, teaches, produces and occasionally performs.
I read that you like to see a full profile with lots of information to show that I'm not a spammer or a troll, but I just haven't gotten around to it. I have a class to teach this afternoon that I'm rushing off to, but first I wanted to say hello! I'll fill up that profile soon, but here are a few favorites, just to prove I'm a real person:
Play: Agnes of God
Novel: The Princess Bride
Playwright: Terrence McNally
Composer: Stephen Sondheim
So, I figured this is as good a place as any to ask this question.
I'm just apprehensive about posting my work. I'm just finishing a draft of my new play Getting Over. I have ideas of what it needs, and I'll be having a private reading soon, but I'd love to get feedback from other playwrights, especially people who don't know my work.
This is my first full-length, so perhaps that's part of my apprehension, but it goes beyond that. It's not that I don't trust the members who have been so welcoming. It's just that once it's out there, it's out there and there's nothing really stopping anyone from creating an account, downloading my play and doing whatever he wants with it.
Is there any way I can post my play and protect it?
I don't know of anyone who has had a problem of a script being stolen from here, but not that that can not happen. If anyone has please mention it.
With less than 900 members on this worldwide Forum, I like to think very few people have the interest or the time to worry about stealing from playwrights. What a sad life they must have if they do. There is more money in searching for pennies lying around on the sidewalk!
We have had a lot of work posted that has been eventually produced , works that have won numerous awards posted, and on down the line. This is a workout room for playwrights and poets as well, with our ad hoc "Resident Poet" timmy consistently posting remarkable work in the Poet's Corner.
History on the Forum has proven that shorter pieces like five to fifteen pages work best. Or openings from full length plays.
Often people will post the first 10-20 pages of a full length play to get some commentary about the beginning of a work. As Billy Wilder once wrote, "If you have a problem in your third act, the problem is in the first act." So a lot can be found in the beginnings of a play.
Also, if you work up a relationship with other playwrights over a period of time, you can e-mail more or all of the script to them. There is a lot of activity through PM's and e-mails that is not seen on the public Forum.
I have read many full-lengths that have been posted piece-meal on this site (meaning a first act, then a second, then a third if there are three.) Or have had them e-mailed to me if I were interested. I even watched one Forum member's entire video of a full production of his play that was posted in about 18 segments on youtube which was a lot of fun.
When someone posts a longer piece it is daunting given the things we all have to do with our lives. Think of posting the first ten or fifteen pages of your piece just as you would send a writing sample of the piece to a theatre.
See the reaction you will get from that first, and then each piece just sort of achieves its own reaction.
So, feel free to post. Prior to the holidays, things were kind of slow on the Forum, but with that out of the way, I look forward to more activity.
Also, the more you participate in commenting on other's work, the more interested others are in commenting on your work. The comments are usually brief, always fair, quite perceptive and as good as you will get anywhere with no academic B.S. No one is here to tear down anyone's work. And it is a well-monitored Forum by paddy and paul which keeps the potential goofballs out of the room. When I check in I can often see paul or paddy's name as in the room doing their job.
I too am a bit apprehensive of internet theft, usually limited to my newest work. So my solution has been to leave my work here for a time, and after a time I take away the full play, leave a bit of a teaser and a url to where they can read the full play on my website where it is down load able as a PDF.
I'm new to all this, I do love to write this is one of my favourite poems
for you to read, I read your play but like Paddy or was it Timmy there was something missing I know your not mean't to be happy go lucky when you break up with someone or maybe it's just me the hardest part for me when i write is the start and for me reading your play it seem so easy for you
Agony and Casualty
Seven hour approximately the agony awaits
To see a fine nurse mending the hurt
Wrapping and strapping the emergency case
Vending machine is out of order
There's one beyond the fracture corridor
X-rays show from head to toe
The plaster is ready and seven hours to go
Doctors in green all sterilised and clean
Examine casualties who become pretty mean
Reception calls another name
The wheelchair is brought up to help the lame
First on the list went to the end
A punk and a drunk go to the front
Casualties' appalled security was called
And put to the end was the drunk ad the punk
Seven hours is the waiting time
Down the corridor was in an uproar
The bedpan was split all over the floor
A man in a crutch went to complain
The nurse threw a fit and got the blame
My seven hours is up I have to go
Take my seat and watch the show
I've been reading your play, David, Life Lessons - and I've found it relatively fantastic. Not completely fantastic, but I'm only saying that so you don't feel too good about yourself. OK, it was pretty fantastic - which is one up from relatively.
Thank you, Stephen! Don't worry about me getting a swelled head. While I am very proud of Susan, I know she needs work, and I have some ideas of where she needs work, but I also want all the feedback I can get, haha!
Patsy, I'm afraid I'm not quite certain what you were referring to. Did you write that poem? It was fascinating. The ebb and flow of the rhymes and the constantly changing rhyme scheme was fun (kind of reminded me of the jagged-edged syncopation of Joseph Moncure March's epic poem The Wild Party). But I'm not sure I got which of my plays (if either of them) it was in reference to. I'd love it if you could post specific critique on the thread for the play, so I can see all of the critiques together.
Who is Stevie? Yes i did write the poem
Oh and as for you not understanding what I mean't was the guy in the script
needs to move on instead of keeping his girl friends clothes he should of chucked them out although I liked the start of the script it was very cleverly put together I can't seem to find the script to read it over again I was quickly browsing through it
and then my computer knocked off and I can't seem to find your script again
I'd love for you to take a closer look and give me your thoughts there. I'm trying a very delicate balancing act with this play, and I'm sort of stuck at the end. I'll post more soon, but if you look closer I think (hope) you'll see why the character is the way he is. And more is revealed later on. And, of course, if these things I'm trying to show are not evident, then I definitely want to know that, as well, so I can fix them!
Charlie contents Dave they all get together. Dave introduces Samatha to Charlie
Charlie losens up a bit he looks at Samatha she reminds him of Amanda tall good looking charming and her smell of that lingering jumper it was all good. They talk
and flirted with each other for most of the night. Dave was impressed and suggested that they should do this more often. By the end of the night Charlie was holding hands a hand that fitted his a pefert hand this girl a beauitful girl this was not Amanda. He excused himself from the table and went to the mens room. He looked at himself in the mirror throughs cold water over his face realitiy hits him big time no more of Amanda that decieving bitch a liar, cheat and yet I loved her so. She was in my life for several years, time passes so quickly love is blind, and here stands infront of me a women a real women who has admired me for as long as she's known me with a complite frame of mind Charlie returns to the table a little flushed Samatha asks with a concern look on her face are you alright. He smiled as if he had heard Amanda but he knew he was only kidding himself. The night was drawing nearer and Dave and his sister and Mark said their good nights. Samatha and Charlie stayed behind He wanted to get to know her better while she drauled over him. He likes her and being around her for him she's was a breath of fresh air. Air that made him breathe again feeling wanted he slip her hand into his and orders the taxi. Samatha invites him back to her appartment
I'm a little confused by some of what you wrote. It would be clearer with a little more punctuation. In any event, I repeat my request that anything you have to say about the play you say it over at that thread, so we can get a dialogue going.
As to Charlie's relation to Samantha and her relation to Dave, Roxie and Marc... well, that will happen in the coming scenes. I only have the first two scenes posted, and there are three more to come. I'll tell you that Samantha does not know any of Charlie's friends (as the play points out, Charlie hasn't really seen them since they were in High School together, and while they've spoken on the phone, they have yet to get together).
I'll go ahead and post the next scene (the end of Act I) and then you'll have a better idea of the characters. I've had a nice dialogue going on over at my thread for Life Lessons with Susan Gail, but I'd love to get some real talk going for Getting Over, since I'm having more trouble with that one.
I'm posting again over here only because there seemed to be a discussion of my play Getting Over starting, and I'm really looking for some feedback. I've posted the rest of Act One in the thread for the play, so there's probably something substantial enough to have a good idea of where I'm going.
Patsy, you seem to have some interesting insights about the characters, and I'm curious to hear what you think, especially what you think of the actual play as written, since you've mostly spoken about your ideas as to what may have happened in scenes that I didn't include.
In any event, any and all feedback on this play would be greatly appreciated!
I really do like the play but i also think its a bit slow. I like Samantha. Shes kind of brassy and sizzling hot she has character. Charlie needs to move on the Amanda thing constantly budding in and talking to himself has to go thats just my opinion. What happens if Roxy comes on to him , will he tell her its time for him to go home because Amanda is there telling him that her breasts are like bullets thats just my expression. Or has he took an nervous break-down over Amanda or maybe hes just fond of his drink. I do like the play and would love to see it on stage.