| Moderated by: Paddy, Edd
| Posted: Wed Dec 1st, 2010 06:58 pm
This is a 5-minute play I wrote very hastily just now for a submission to the Working Collective Theatre (http://theworkingtheatrecollective.wordpress.com/).
I know it's not my best, but wonder if it could be fixed up into something worth shopping around, or if I should just leave it as an exercise.
Thanks in advance for your feedback!
| Posted: Wed Dec 1st, 2010 07:02 pm
|A and C should dress somewhat similarly, as should B and D, who each wear kneesocks and short bottoms (short shorts, miniskirt, etc.)
An empty stage. This could be anywhere, real or dreamed.
AT RISE: A and B on stage. B wears kneesocks and short bottoms.
A You must be --
A I like your kneesocks.
A What have you got under them?
(On another part of the stage, C and D meet. D also wears kneesocks and short bottoms.)
C You must be --
D Why must I?
C Your kneesocks.
D My kneesocks.
C I really like them.
C What have you got under them?
D A tattoo.
C Can I see it?
B You want to know what I have under my socks?
(D pulls down a sock. There is a hammer of Thor tattooed down the entire calf.)
D You like what you see?
A Yes. Very much.
B Too bad.
C Can I touch it?
B How do I know you're not --
(C touches D's tattoo. D moans.)
A I've never done this before.
C I've never done this before.
B No. Neither have I.
D Never done it with a pagan?
A You like music?
B There's this diner up the road, old 50's sort of place.
D You don't know what you're missing.
C I'd like to find out.
B They have great burgers, deliciously creamy shakes . . .
D You know what I am?
B And the best jukebox in town.
C The best in town?
D Now who told you that?
B You wanna go?
C Now, I'm not one to kiss and tell. . . .
D Yeah? Where did you sleep last night?
C Tit for tat?
D No. Who did you sleep with?
C (pause) No one.
A I am a little cold.
C I'm really lonely.
B and D (together) Like the last living polar bear.
What? Yeah, I guess.
B Nothing. I was just thinking of . . . I don't know.
D You wanna go?
B You wanna go?
C Go where?
B To the diner?
D Don't you trust me?
C No, but . . .
A and C (together) Let's go.
(B takes A's hand, and D takes C's, and they walk off as the lights fade.)
Last edited on Wed Dec 1st, 2010 07:05 pm by carlblong
| Posted: Tue Dec 14th, 2010 11:54 am
|I found it interesting but I was waiting for it to build to some revelation of meaning.
| Posted: Fri Dec 17th, 2010 08:54 pm
|Thanks for your comment. I'll play around with it, see what happens.
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