Maybe I'm reading this wrong or my mind is in the gutter, but is Bobby's dick what's in supposed to be in her hand on the closing line? If that's the case, I would probably be offended watching this as it seems to be condoning sexual agression towards women under this "boys will be boys" mentality (despite it being the end of the world).
I don't meant to bruise any feelings by saying that - it's merely what my honest response to it would be as an audience member.
Yeah, I read that too, Darkja. Nathan are you trying to imply that I have a thin skin, and am offended easily? Because, actually, nothing could be farther from the truth. I love dirty, smutty jokes and is one of the things I love about the medium of theatre, that theatre has the best, most creative, dirtiest jokes. For example, do you think Anthony Neilson's The Censor is a work that could be a big blockbuster motion picture? It's something I highly doubt.
However, this is the basic rundown of your script as I read it (please correct me if I'm wrong):
- End of the world is occurring. (I did like that it was casually referred to, and was precisely timed.)
- Bobby wants to get some action before the end.
- Teresa says no.
- Lights go out.
- Teresa: "What's this?"
- Bobby: "Shut up and give me a handjob."
Now it seems to me, that the intent of the writer is for me as an audience member to chuckle and go "Oh - that crazy Bobby, what will he get up to next!", but really my response is "Bobby! You ass! What's wrong with you?"
So, yeah, I was offended.
Though, Nathan, I have to admit I've been in the same boat - I have this short script about two "musicians" whose performances consist of them performing cunnilingus on two women and using the resultant sexual moans to create musical arrangements. Half the people I've shown it to were in tears of laughter, the other half think it's the most virulently offensive and misogynist script they've ever read.
So yeah, I like dirty jokes, just thought this one was a bit messed up.
And like I said, I didn't mean to get confrontational with you, nathan, and hope I haven't discouraged you from posting more of your work.
It is not the playwright's job - no pun intended - to be the moral compass. It is the playwright's job to tell a story. Pissing people off is good. Putting them them to sleep, or enciting phrases like, "It was lovely. It was charming. Very nice.", should scare you.
For me, the ending was a bit skitish. Bodumpdah ching.
"Though, Nathan, I have to admit I've been in the same boat - I have this short script about two "musicians" whose performances consist of them performing cunnilingus on two women and using the resultant sexual moans to create musical arrangements. Half the people I've shown it to were in tears of laughter, the other half think it's the most virulently offensive and misogynist script they've ever read."
As if what...two women would hate having two men perform...and I do emphasize 'perform' cunnilingus on them AND create some beautiful imaginative music?