| Critique my Poem > to be in the world (1 reply - 449 views)
A man wakes to a brilliant twinkling light. He stares ahead at nothing, inhales and then adjusts his car seat in its upright ... Wed May 9th, 2012 10:18 pm Critique my Poem > equinox (1 reply - 457 views)
Now nearer the autumnal equinox
She held it to my ear,
my hands
engulfed in hers,
“it’s ... Wed Apr 4th, 2012 10:28 am Critique my Poem > equinox (1 reply - 457 views)
why we tell our children
cupping a seashell
you can still
hear the ocean…
... Mon Apr 2nd, 2012 10:42 am Critique my Poem > the last poem (3 replies - 396 views)
It was always so,
wasting another afternoon
near the window
waiting for her
to walk bye…
... Fri Oct 28th, 2011 07:16 am Critique my Play > Fugit Amor (0 replies - 410 views)
Act one
A motel room. Early a.m.
Scene one: An exhale. Ray unfixes himself from between Sophie’s legs. She curls up ... Thu Sep 29th, 2011 09:18 pm Critique my Poem > the king of infinite space (0 replies - 736 views)
there I was
drinking tea
my cup and saucer
atop the paisley table cloth
the cigarette
inching closer
between my fingers,
the floor,
and floating away into
the ether
I think you need ... Fri Sep 2nd, 2011 03:41 am Critique my Play > Cthonic (0 replies - 916 views)
Cthonic
A play in ... Sat Nov 6th, 2010 11:00 pm Critique my Play > Yggdrasil (7 replies - 873 views)
Yeah. Lots of fun. I was effortlessly engaged in the mystery. Great tension and you don't just clarify the mystery but deepen it. Well done, ... Thu Aug 19th, 2010 09:37 pm Critique my Play > Coming To America (15 replies - 1415 views)
"On Boxing Day, my father performed his early morning ritual, a cup of tea, the BBC news and the winding of the clock. ... Thu Aug 19th, 2010 09:19 pm Critique my Play > Coming To America (15 replies - 1415 views)
John,
Just wanted to say, I love the opening. Though, it feels like a misplaced novel instead of a play there are some exciting staging possibilities ... Wed Aug 18th, 2010 04:09 am Critique my Poem > la vida puta (2 replies - 501 views)
I think of him
head down
merchandise lain out
the watches, chrome hubcaps,
a copy
... Thu Jun 25th, 2009 11:05 am Critique my Poem > 1951 (7 replies - 952 views)
lovely poem, Timmy.
tap me on the shoulder if you need anything.
john
... Wed May 13th, 2009 02:42 pm Critique my Poem > The pearls (0 replies - 335 views)
before the swine
wake
Gergis Feris bends his neck,
scratches the nape,
thinks ... Wed May 13th, 2009 02:37 pm Question & Answer > autistic and emotionally disturbed children (4 replies - 1238 views)
I'll read anything you suggest and work from there
... Sat Mar 22nd, 2008 05:14 am Question & Answer > autistic and emotionally disturbed children (4 replies - 1238 views)
I teach an eigth grade class at a school for autistic and emotionally disturbed children. I'm looking for suggestions about plays to read in class. ... Fri Mar 21st, 2008 05:33 am Critique my Poem > Epigram to the Strange Girl in the Cookery Class (4 replies - 953 views)
I expected a glance to turn into gazing,
gazing into curiousity and then into experience.
such a fine end this would have been to an ode on ... Mon Feb 4th, 2008 03:00 pm Critique my Poem > why the butterfly envies the moth (1 reply - 994 views)
The day you die
you dream of a room
you’ve never been before
maybe
a British drawing room,
portraits of people you don’t recognize,
an empty fireplace,
a glass dinner ... Fri Jan 25th, 2008 05:45 am Critique my Play > Limbo, Ohio (13 replies - 2025 views)
Alan,
I like the play as is but if you were committed to expanding it, then I wonder what it might feel like to let us ... Sun Jul 8th, 2007 06:06 am Critique my Poem > graphic novel (1 reply - 739 views)
in a white room
in the east
a boy undulates to the ticking
of a clock
he can’t read.
a line
from a film
escapes the lips of the boy
caught by ... Sat Mar 31st, 2007 05:24 am Critique my Poem > Widows and doors (1 reply - 870 views)
There she stood
a step above
the cobble stone street
all in black,
bare feet.
Peering out
over the great wooden
frame looming
over her
all of these years.
Still
a hand clinching
the faux ... Wed Dec 20th, 2006 06:32 am Critique my Poem > Poem (7 replies - 1798 views)
Hey Kal,
Vivid images. I think the interesting challenge in this poem, if you were inclined to write another draft, would be to eliminate the setting ... Fri Jun 30th, 2006 04:57 am Critique my Poem > EMAIL BLUES (4 replies - 1234 views)
I think if Shel Silverstein were given the opportunity to write a poem about spam....email spam, he would've written this poem. Well done, Edd.
j.
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